In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

In the modern
world
, where
population
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a population
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of people continues to grow rapidly, a significant amount of innovations and advances have been made
for
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the past decade in
agricultural
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the agricultural
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sector in order to provide
growing
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population with sufficient food.
Although
, there are still a lot of people who suffer from hunger.
This
essay will cover a reason and a solution, which I
beleive
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believe
, can make a difference quickly enough. It is not a secret, that a majority of
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new technological breakthroughs and innovations in agriculture were made in developed
countries
. Most of them were highly expensive and,
therefore
, only
first
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first-world
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world
countries
could afford to
implemented
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them successfully.
According to
the
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recent study made by
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scientists almost 75 per cent of all crops harvested worldwide in the
last
year were made in developed
countries
.
Thus
, the conclusion can be made, that
second
and
third
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third-world
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world
countries
can not afford all of those advances for their agricultural sectors,
consequently
harvesting
less
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crops per square meter of cultivated area and not managing to provide their population with enough food.
This
issue is quite difficult to tackle,
nonetheless
, in my opinion, there is
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one way to solve it.
That is
to establish charity organisations in developing
countries
, that would help local farmers to implement different innovations for free, increasing their crop efficiency per square
meters
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and
hence
decrease
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the
leven
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level
of starving people.
To conclude
, the
expenciveness
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expensiveness
expansiveness
of new technologies in agriculture
have
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made
this
disparity in the modern
world
, when some
countries
can produce a sufficient amount of products to feed their nation,
while
others suffer from
a hunger
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hunger
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. But no matter how
difficalt
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difficult
this
problem might be seen, I strongly believe, that letting these
countries
to
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acquire new technologies for free will help them to avoid
a
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starvation in the future, and both developed and developing
countries
will benefit from it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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