People who live in busy cities are in many ways at a disadvantage to those who live in rural areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is a perspective that
people
who inhabit urban areas
tend to be at demerits compared to those who live in Correct article usage
the countrysides
countrysides
. I convey my disagreement over that statement which will be elaborated more Fix the agreement mistake
countryside
along
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in
this
essay by providing several underlying reasons.
To begin
with, the most common reason why people
choose to live in crowded cities is the more tempting career they might gain that is
not the same as in rural areas
. The livelihood opportunity definitely leads to higher
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a higher
salary
, an all in all-motivation that humans pursue. That fact is Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
undebateably
a huge advantage Correct your spelling
undebatable
debatably
people
get from living in urban areas
. To exemplify, in Java, that
known as one of the most crowded islands in the world located in Indonesia, many Correct word choice
apply
people
choose to stay, generation to generation. That condition has been occurring in view of the fact that recent urbanization that can be seen from the establishment of new companies brings many employments that people
from a wide range of backgrounds are seeking.
Additionally
, rather in the rural areas
, living in urban areas
ease the accessibility to dozens of public facilities such
as schools, offices, colleges, markets, sport
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sports
centers
, etc. In some Change the spelling
centres
countrysides
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countries
people
have to go miles away just to find certain public facilities. This
convenience influences the quality of people
's lives from the time management and energy spent. Hence
, people
will have more time to focus on the things that need more concern like career and study, in order to live the best life.
To sum up
, I disagree that people
who live in urban areas
are at demerits compared to those who inhabit rural areas
. This
statement is supported by the evidence of opportunities related to earnings and public facilities that only those who live in crowded areas
gain.Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
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