People who live in busy cities are in many ways at a disadvantage to those who live in rural areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a perspective that
people
who inhabit urban
areas
tend to be at demerits compared to those who live in
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. I convey my disagreement over that statement which will be elaborated more
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essay by providing several underlying reasons.
To begin
with, the most common reason why
people
choose to live in crowded cities is the more tempting career they might gain
that is
not the same as in rural
areas
. The livelihood opportunity definitely leads to
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salary
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, an all in all-motivation that humans pursue. That fact is
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a huge advantage
people
get from living in urban
areas
. To exemplify, in Java,
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known as one of the most crowded islands in the world located in Indonesia, many
people
choose to stay, generation to generation. That condition has been occurring in view of the fact that recent urbanization that can be seen from the establishment of new companies brings many employments that
people
from a wide range of backgrounds are seeking.
Additionally
, rather in the rural
areas
, living in urban
areas
ease the accessibility to dozens of public facilities
such
as schools, offices, colleges, markets,
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centers
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, etc. In some
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,
people
have to go miles away just to find certain public facilities.
This
convenience influences the quality of
people
's lives from the time management and energy spent.
Hence
,
people
will have more time to focus on the things that need more concern like career and study, in order to live the best life.
To sum up
, I disagree that
people
who live in urban
areas
are at demerits compared to those who inhabit rural
areas
.
This
statement is supported by the evidence of opportunities related to earnings and public facilities that only those who live in crowded
areas
gain.
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