Many people say that globalization and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that
globalization
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and the increasing number of multinational
companies
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affect to
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environment
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. I partially disagree with
this
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statement, because through
globalization
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, many
companies
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start to try to solve crucial
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environment
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issues. On the one hand, rapid
globalization
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and
sharp
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the sharp
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increase of multinational
companies
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might cause
destruction
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the destruction
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of
globe
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the globe
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. Some
of
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companies
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the companies
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tend to construct factories in
some
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apply
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foreign
place
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places
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which there are affluent
nature
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, to prepare for the inclining of demand thanks to
globalization
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.
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, they tend to ignore the rule of each
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because they do not afford to check these regulations
due to
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rapid
globalization
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. In the case of some developed countries in Asia, expansion of factories area, some
deforestration
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deforestation
and water pollution of the sea
are occurred
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. It must be because of
the
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globalization
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and rising the number of multinational
companies
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.
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, to be
globalization
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and
become
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multinational
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companies
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company
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means these
companies
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have more opportunities to understand the situation of each
countries
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country
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about
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regarding
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environment
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the environment
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and get some knowledge about the solutions of protecting
destroy
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destruction
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of nature.
In addition
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, these
company
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companies
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tend to spend their allocation
to
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on
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sustainability, so through
these information
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this information
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, they can tackle
to
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these issues more effectively. In Malaysia, a Japanese appliance company, which constructed some factories in Malaysia, tried to approach
to reduce
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garbage by using
recycle
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material
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materials
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to
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their products. As a
results
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, the amount of some types of garbage is decreasing now. In conclusion, I reiterate that
globalization
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and the growing
the
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number of multinational
companies
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have a not only bad
effect
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effects
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, but
also
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positive
effect
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effects
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to
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on
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environment
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the environment
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, and
benefits
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the benefits
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outweigh
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • industrial expansion
  • pollution
  • carbon emissions
  • prioritize profit
  • environmental regulations
  • resource depletion
  • environmental degradation
  • production practices
  • supply chain
  • deforestation
  • loss of biodiversity
  • mass consumerism
  • waste production
  • environmental harm
  • international regulations
  • exploit
  • environmental standards
  • developing countries
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