In the future it may be necessary for us to live on other planets. For this reason, some people believe that we should spend money now to research other planets, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The three diagrams illustrate information about the percentages of

sodium

, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals eaten by Americans.These three may harm the body when consumed in large quantities.

Overall

, it can be clearly seen from the charts that a majority of American citizens consume

sodium

and added

sugar

during breakfast and snacking time

while

a handful eats less

sodium

and added

sugar

in the morning.

To begin

with, during breakfast, a few individuals eat all three nutrients with just 14% taking

sodium

Remove the comma

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and the other 2 nutrients with both 16%. Coming to lunchtime, a considerable number of individuals eat

sodium

and saturated fat (29% and 26%)

whereas

19% eat added

sugar

Furthermore

, most Americans consume more

sodium

and saturated fat during dinner with 43% and 37% respectively.

Moreover

, snacks with added

sugar

are

also

eaten in large quantities of 42% and a small percentage being

sodium

(14%).

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 7.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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