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You normally go shopping in the area where you live. However, you think some of the facilites for shoppers could be improved. Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter:say in general what you like about shopping in your area, say what is wrong with the facilities, suggest how they can be improved

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am a resident of Maple Street and I am a frequent shopper of Mapple Greens Shopping Mall. I am writing
this
 letter to express my suggestions to improve
shopping
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 facilities situated in our area. I can never deny that the shopping area provides convenience to every resident because it provides comprehensive services and supplies that suit the needs of the locals. There is no need for us to leave the town just to purchase products and appliances for almost everything from electric kettles to microwave ovens
are
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 being sold here.
Not to mention
 the bargains and big discounts it usually offers.
Moreover
, the staff are very friendly and helpful
especially
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 to senior citizens.
However
, I have noted concerns with some of the facilities of the building that are in need of improvement. The markings on the parking areas are no longer visible,
thus
 making it difficult for shoppers to distinguish one parking slot from the other.
Also
, the lights in the parking area are in need of replacement since three out of ten light bulbs are not anymore working. Thank you so much for reading my letter. I hope for an urgent response regarding my requests. Respectfully, Raysan Joy Lopez
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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