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The charts below show that percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show that percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the proportion of three types of nutrients people are consuming in each meal and in snakes in the USA. If individuals consumed too many nutrients it leads to being unhealthy.
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, the information given that at the time of ,dinner person is consuming higher nutritions
such
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 as
sodium
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, saturated fat and added
sugar
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 and the percentage is 43%, 37% and 23% respectively.
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, it can be seen that breakfast contains the lowest amount of
sodium
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 (14%), saturated fat (16%) and added
sugar
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(16%).  The remaining two meals are lunch and snacks. As the ,eating the time of lunch 29%
sodium
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, 26% saturated fat and 19% added
sugar
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 are consumed. ,
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 the snake ,time people take a higher percentage of added
sugar
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 42% compared to
sodium
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 consumes 14% and saturated fat includes 21%.
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, it is clearly visible from the pie charts that every typical meal consumed in the USA contains ả percentage of at least 14% of nutrients that can be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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