In many companies today, applicants are often rejected due to old age. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In many enterprises nowadays, old candidates are not the choice of recruiters. Personally, I opine that
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phenomenon has positive sides, it
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exists some negative aspects. The positive aspects of
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trend are attributable to several reasons. First of all, by refusing the applications of old applicants, recruiters can create an
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opportunity
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to work. Since nowadays, young generations are very creative and well-equipped with soft skills,
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,
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can help
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corporations to fully
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develop
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a beverage project, young
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often have new ideas about how to make the product gain momentum.
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, employers cannot determine whether old candidates are capable of handling a mountain of work or
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overtime. Since when some individuals are old, many health issues will appear
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as being exhausted easily or having
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impairment.
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, there is
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debilitating
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effect of
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phenomenon which cannot be neglected. The main point is that old employees often have more life experiences which can be used to address difficult
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than young
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. It goes without saying
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that
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young
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are well-equipped with many skills
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they are
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inexperience
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in tackling issues which happen suddenly.
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, young employees often have trouble
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dealing with
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problems
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as they do not know how to fully satisfy them.
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, thanks to the appearance of old employees, not only are the
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solved
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young
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can be instructed
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how to deal with
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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