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Some people think that secondary or high school students should be taught to use money management as it is an important life skill. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#people #school #students #money #management #life #skill
Teaching students the practicality of
life
 must be the goal of true education. With
this
, I strongly agree
to
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 the teaching of
financal
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financial
 literacy among high school students to inculcate
life
 valuable
skill
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skills
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 as early as possible.
Firstly
, several adults and even young
professional
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professionals
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 nowadays suffer enormous debts though working 24/7 in a stable company and receiving a reasonable salary. The main reason
of
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for
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this
dillema
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dilemma
 is poor money management and lack of financial education.
For instance
, almost 90% of employees have salary loans, car loans, and
house
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houses
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 under bank financing.
Moreover
, their net pay was not anymore sufficient to suffice daily needs because of automatic deductions to their payrolls.
Thus
, they have to meet
the
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their
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 ends and live
pay check
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paycheck
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 to
pay check
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paycheck
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.
As a result
, the economy
in general
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, in general,
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 will be affected because of the
low quality
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low-quality
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life
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of life
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 people are experiencing. I believe that education is the best solution to
this
 predicament. Teaching citizens to be wise when it comes to finances will foster
life
 satisfaction and improve
quality
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the quality
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 of
life
. Educators can
molding
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mould
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 the minds of young individuals by introducing them
simple
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to simple
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 concepts on how to make savings out of their daily allowances. Through
series
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a series
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 of instructions, their knowledge will
be broaden
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 to
budgetting
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budgeting
 and managing resources which will turn out to be a
lifetime
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life
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 skill. Eventually, they will be
staff
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staffed
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 in the near future.
Thus
, they will have
the
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apply
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greater opportunities to travel abroad, dine in
a
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apply
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fancy
restaurant
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restaurants
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, purchase gadgets to produce quality output at work, and avail
retirement
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of retirement
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insurances
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insurance
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 since they are trained to balance needs and wants.
Therefore
, most
probbably
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probably
 they will experience a more comfortable
life
.
To conclude
, educating young minds
with
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 money management means you are contributing to their success
of
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in
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 freeing themselves from financial
obligation
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obligations
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.
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