The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the cause of this ? what can be done to solve this problem.

There is no doubt that, the importance of
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environment
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areas. The burgeoning in the manufacture of customer goods outcome in damage to the natural surroundings. In my perspective,
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essay will explicate some of its causes
as well as
some problems to solve
this
matter. To commence with, there are the predominant causes first one is. Pollution demand. To explain it, most of the
people
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society and other streets
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use
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plastic polythene, and when they buy from the market when they finish their packet they through on the road, nor they do not put
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the
dustbine
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dustbin
dustbins
.
However
, it might occur some kind of
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unsafeness
of the masses.
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garbage collector comes in the street to pick
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waste material they go to the cabinet store to through all these waste products and
then
they and
then
they do fire
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it after that pollution
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around the
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,
this
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the problem of disease and asthma
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Secondly
, the main point is that
less
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opportunities
of
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job
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available in the factory. It means, if customers do not
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in
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the factory or
shop
to buy the garments so the owner of the factory will
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their sales in
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routine.
Moreoso
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Moreover
, if
new
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fresher comes to the
shop
for
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vacancy and the manager of the
shop
says
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is no available and
also
they give a less salary to employees who
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in the
shop
.
On the other hand
, there are some Of the Tribble to
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this
matter. To explain it,
government
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should take high funds from the
people
and
also
provid
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provide
some awareness and
campaigned
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programs among society persons.
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, there should be
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hight
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panelty
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penalty
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consumer goods who are doing these things. To recapitulate,
although
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in
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the fact that there
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of
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the
cause
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which can be followed by
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people
;
however
, some of the solutions which
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the
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benifit
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benefit
benefits
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the
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individuals to stop
this
habit.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production
  • consumer goods
  • natural environment
  • damage
  • causes
  • overconsumption
  • demand
  • environmental regulations
  • enforcement
  • natural resources
  • industrial pollution
  • waste
  • inadequate
  • waste management practices
  • public awareness
  • education
  • sustainable alternatives
  • stricter environmental laws
  • recycling
  • responsible consumption
  • clean technologies
  • renewable energy
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