Surveillance cameras in banks, officers, shops and streets have been very successful in reducing crime in the workplace and in public, but they are also a tool for their users to spy on people private business. What problems do the use of surveillance cameras create? Is there any solution?

With the growth of technology, especially the advances
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surveillance
gadgets, it is undeniable that
CCTV
cameras
play an important role in decreasing
crime
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rate in the workplace and in the public.
However
, these
cameras
are
also
a device to watch
people
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people's
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private business secretly.
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essay will point out the obstacles of using
surveillance
devices
as well as
propose solutions to deal with these problems. The main reason for using
CCTV
gadgets to intrude
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people
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privacy is
the
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insecure
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of
surveillance
softwares
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software
. In fact, many black-hat hackers can easily steal
data
from
surveillance
cameras
with few lines of code. They will use these photos and videos taken from
cameras
for commercial purposes or posting on social media.
That is
why sometimes we see some funny videos taken from
CCTV
videos.
In addition
, hackers can earn money from selling
surveillance
data
to
third
parties. Companies who buy these
data
may know
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behaviours and private activities
,
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so that they can promote their company’s product easier.
For instance
, the
third
party knows that we like buying
cellphones
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cell phones
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on images exported from
cameras
,
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so
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they will use phone numbers bought from another
third
party to sell their products.
Hence
,
CCTV
devices can be a useful tool for
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a hacker
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hacker
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hackers
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to spy on
ours
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activities. A possible solution to tackle these problems is to install stronger security systems for
surveillance
softwares
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software
. We can install
firewall
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or 2-factor authentication, which requires users
enter
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stronger passwords so that our private
data
and information will be protected. In fact, many technology companies use
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the firewall
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firewall
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as the strongest tool to keep their essential documents safe.
To conclude
, various actions can be taken to enhance the privacy of
surveillance
cameras
, so that hackers cannot steal
ours
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private business anymore.
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