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What are the advantages and disadventages of the increasing use of technology?

#disadventages #technology
Increasing
use
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the use
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 of
technology
 is beneficial .One of the main advantages of increasing
use
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the use
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 of
technology
 is that it can simplify our
life
 . Nowadays are
being
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modern-day . All
of
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people
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the people
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 can use
technology
 . In my opinion, some
people
 can not imagine their
life
 without
technology
 .
This
 is because ,
life
bounding
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 up with
technology
 ,
such
 as mobile
phone
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phones
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, washing
machine
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machines
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,
computer
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computers
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 and
other
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others
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.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, technologies are inventing . So , it can be beneficial for everyone . There
are
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 various
opportunity
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opportunities
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 for learning .
For instance
 , watching videos ,
such
 as cooking , sewing and other . They help to improve skills .
On the other hand
 , I think ,
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increasinguse
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increasing use
of
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in
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technology
 has various
disadventages
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disadvantages
.
Firstly
 , I can say that using
mobile
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a mobile
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phone
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phones
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 or
computer
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computers
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 much more is harmful
for
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to
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 health , especially for
eyes
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the eyes
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 . What is more , some
people
's
life
 is depending on
technology
. The main worry about that
technology
 can take human's place in the near future .
In addition
,
People
 always look for quick solutions to their problems . In my opinion,
People
 can live without
technology
.
However
 , they think that they can not live .
This
 is because
,
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they do not try for
this
 . In prehistoric times ,
people
 can live without
technology
. All things considered,
technologies
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technology
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 are being part of our
life
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