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Why people do not prefer exercise in their busy life or free time .

Presently, a huge number of folks prefer not to
exercise
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 whether they have time or not. They compromise
over
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their health. In
this
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essay
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 I would like to demonstrate reasons for their inactive attitude towards
workout
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and good suggestions to overcome
this
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 issue.
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 with the initial issue of
materialistic
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the materialistic
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 nature of
people
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. A huge number of
people
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 just want to
work
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 and derive money enormously to-meet
up
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their life
standard
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standards
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. They
work
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 from day to night to get all the comfort of their lives,
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however
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 they don’t get
chance
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 at their
work
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 to keep their body in good shape.
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 there must be
work
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 and life balance. Our body needs a nourishing lifestyle rather than a hectic one. That leads towards various diseases. To overcome
this
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 issue, I would like to suggest a solution.
People
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 should take a couple of minutes out of their busy
routine
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. As it is stated, health is wealth. If we would not have health, wealth would be of no use.
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, lame excuses are the main reason to
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give
 up on physical activities.
People
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 believe that for
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training they must have an approach to the gym. They should have a treadmill, running boots and all the required equipment for standard practice.
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, they would decline
exercise
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 completely. In ,addition youngsters prefer spending leisure time on social media rather than being in nature or doing physical activities. To solve above mentioned issues, I suggest a good solution. Many
people
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 like to dance but not
work
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 out, for them Aerobics
exercise
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, which is really good for vital organs, is the best way to stay fit and healthy. Like ,
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 they can start with gentle
exercise
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 and
then
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 gradually towards strenuous
exercise
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.
Furthermore
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, smartphones can be used as proper equipment for lazy
people
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. They can simply download various available applications.
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, they can stay in good shape and safe from chronic diseases.
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 , folks should prioritize their well-being over their busy schedules and show
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 attitude towards gentle
exercise
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 to refrain from chronic diseases.

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