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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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people
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 consider that the only motive for mastering a foreign
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 is in order to whether
travel
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 or
work
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 in a foreign country.
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others
 think that these are not
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 motives why someone
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 to
master
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 a foreign
language
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. These days many individuals are attracted by
travel
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 and job advertisements.On the one hand, some
people
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 feel the only purpose to learn a foreign
language
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 is to
travel
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 or
work
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.
However
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, others feel they don't need to
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 any
language
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 in order to
travel
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 and
work
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.The merits of both arguments will
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 before a conclusion is decided.
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, some argue Learning a foreign
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 is to expand
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 horizon and gain knowledge.Because of communication with
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 and making friends from other countries.
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, nowadays individuals are working from home or watching videos about other countries.There is no need to
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 for travelling or working.
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 were suffering from covid-19 and
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there
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,even though, some
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 have no craving to stay at home or
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.
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, the merits of
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,many other
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 see
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education system.
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, in France and
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 well-educated individuals yearn to
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,but they do not reckon their only purpose to learn
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 is not travelling or working.
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 generation
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 eager to apply for universities or jobs, it does mean they should
master
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languages
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 but not
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travel
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 or
work
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.
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 opinion regarding the role of education of
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 can clearly be seen. After looking at these
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opposing points of view, it is felt that learning a foreign
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 is in order to
travel
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 or
work
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.
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 it is education to
master
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languages
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, not to take advantage of it
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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