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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
Most
people
 say that the only cause for learning a foreign
language
 is due to
trip
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 to or work in a foreign
country
. Leftovers say that these are not the only
disposes
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ofdisposes
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 why someone should learn a foreign
language
.
Furthermore
, there are a
lot
 of reasons for learning languages.
This
 is because everyone wants to travel around the world or work for a good earner in a foreign
country
. By the
way
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 it originates from a
lot
 of conclusions. In my opinion,
this
 is all purposes related to earning money. If you should go to any county,
firstly
 you need to know at least B2 level
this
language
.
This
 is because a degree is considered enough to travel.
To begin
 with, a big part of
people
 regarding if you go to any county, played a major role in money. Of course, I agree with
this
 given statement, but it doesn't hurt to know the
language
.
On the other hand
, there are not only one
reasons
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reason
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 to travel. I can give you a
lot
 of examples for
this
 assessment.
For instance
, nowadays around a quarter of the world's population
suffer
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suffers
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 from a variety of diseases.
However
, my
country
's medical services are not developing like India or the USA . That's why
,
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apply
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 many
people
 go to other countries in search of a cure for their diseases. For
that
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 we should invite a visit to
qualification
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qualified
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 doctors
such
 as in our tremendous
country
.
For example
, we must take priority over countries. In conclusion, both sides of
people
 are right, because humanity is learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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languages
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 for a
lot
 of grounds. Another way is by studying new languages , improving intelligence and reaching those who really want.
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