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Some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 is societies suggested for several
professionals
 people should be regulated to stay where they were trained.
However
, I reckon that it is more reasonable for those professional individuals to choose wherever they desire to
work
. To start with,
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 should be free to
work
 in different
countries
 since it is their right to make their own decisions.
Moreover
, limiting doctors and engineers to
work
in
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where they got trained is unfair.
For instance
, it is unreasonable if
countries
 force all
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international students to
work
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they trained
instead
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jobs back in their
hometown
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.
Hence
, I believe that people with professions should be able to decide their
workplace
.
Nevertheless
, some dispute that
professionals
 should be limited to the same country where their training took place.
On the other hand
,
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 about the compulsory regulation of
workplace
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 may lead to
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 developments between
countries
 and
countries
.
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,
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fixed
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workplace
 is compulsory, it might end up
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professionals
 in
the
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small
countries
.
Thus
, I believe that it is more appropriate to have individuals choose where to
work
. In conclusion, I believe that it is more beneficial and appropriate for
professionals
 to
work
 in different
countries
 as they wish since it is their right and the limit of
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 may lead to imbalanced developments between
countries
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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