Some believe that people will always purchase a product based on their needs. So, advertising is not needed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, it has become conventional for companies to advertise their
products
, and some may argue that advertising is unnecessary since people will only buy
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products
they needed. In my view, it is partly true that people always buy
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goods, yet
advertisement
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still
play
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an important role in today society's. To commence with, advertising is one of the key factors in boosting business profits. A prime reason is
because
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that
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the
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sales
and advertising are always linked together. To
further
illustrate, companies can increase their
sales
by promoting the features and functions of the
products
through advertising.
For instance
, some advertisements will attract and stimulate customers to buy the
products
, with interesting jingles and creative
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.
Furthermore
,
advertising
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industry has created numerous
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jobs
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opportunities.
This
had
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millions of people around the world to get jobs
such
as poster designers, video editors, and digital marketing.
On the other hand
, it is undeniable that
ads
sometimes is annoying and intrusive.
Although
ads
act like a booster for
sales
,
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advertisements that frequently
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up
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everywhere else, especially when someone browsing the internet, could be an interference.
In addition
, not all
ads
are real as
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to the original
products
. Manufacturers might include other elements
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the
ads
, which
oftenly
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often
exaggerate the actual performances of the commodity.
As a result
, consumers might get
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from
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the
ads
and in the worsen case scenario, buyers might get confused and wrongly use the
products
. In conclusion, I
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agree with the statement, and it is true that advertising
assits
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assists
assist
businesses increase their
sales
revenue,
however
,
ads
sometimes might abuse by manufacturers that
utimately
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ultimately
lead to bad results.
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