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10.G.Too many historical buildings are in danger and destroyed in many countries. What are the main reason and how to protect them?

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the charts
illustarte
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illustrate
 differences in ownership of electrical
devicese
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devices
 and
amount
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the amount
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 of
time
 that has been used to make housework in households in a country
betwen
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between
 the given period (1920-2019).
overall
, there is a
sinificant
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significant
 increase in paying
electics
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electrics
,
whereas
 housework hours are
droped
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dropped
draped
 dramatically to reach the lowest beak.
to begin
 with, the electrical devices
where
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were
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 at
lowest
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the lowest
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 point in 1920 it was zero for
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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, 30
percent
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per cent
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 for vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 and 40
percent
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per cent
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 for washing
machine
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machines
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,but with
time
peopls
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people
 begin to pay more and more because of
it's
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their
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importaces
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importance
 to reduce the hard work and the
time
 needed.
for example
, washing
mashine
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machine
 reached just above 70 in 2019.
on the other hand
,
time
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the time
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 needed to clean the house has sharply
decrease
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decreased
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due to
 electrical appliances,which are now
dowing
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doing
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 most of the work, where the
time
 required to do it took 50
hourse
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hours
 in 1920 it
is now take
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now takes
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 only 10 or few more.
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