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The best way to understand different cultures is by working at a multinational organization. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Do you know the best way to know a nation's culture,is by learning
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language
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? Many people are open to engaging with different civilizations,
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, there are some obstacles.
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 worker definitely facilitates understanding new
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, I believe knowing the nation's
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 travelling is the easiest approach to learning
any
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 culture. First of all
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.
Language
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 tends to be the most significant barrier, that prevents people from investigating new
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.
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, I have friends living in east Europe for years,
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, their knowledge of society's culture is over-limited
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, absolutely, you gain information regarding their lifestyles, religion, their national dishes and so on.
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, travelling.
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 it is clear through history books, that famous people who wrote about cultural diversity, tend to travel all over the world. A clear example, nowadays, travelling will make you experience the way of life in other countries,
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 to their celebration, wedding ceremony, etc.
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, being involved in vacancies with multicultural persons will enhance the understanding of
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,
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, I believe the perfect procedure to do that, is by travelling and learning other languages.

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