Some people think that it's a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it's important to keep working life completely separate frmo social life. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Social
life
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involves a variety of
activities
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,
the
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and the
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necessarity
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necessity
of
separate
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separating
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working
life
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from personal
life
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has been
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for a long time. Some
people
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believe that
people
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should still
socialising
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socialise
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with their
colleagues
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even after
the
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work.
People
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usually have havey tasks during working hours, which will lead to a lack of chance to have deeper communication with other
staffs
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.
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, it is a great opportunity to have
futher
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further
social
activities
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with
colleagues
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,
such
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as
go
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going
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to
gym
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the gym
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, hiking and
go
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going
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to
restaurant
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a restaurant
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together after working hours. These
activities
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will likely lead to a closer relationship between
colleagues
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, and
by
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apply
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doing these could result in a comfortable atmosphere that will help to boost the efficiency of work.
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,
people
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usually will spend
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of their
life
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on
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working,
therefore
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,
colleagues
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might be the person that
people
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spend the most of
time
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their time
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with. If the relationships with co-workers are not well developed,
people
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would
be quite suffer
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during their working hours.
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, work
are
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not the only thing
people
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have in their lives, families, hobbies,
friends
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and friends
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are
also
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inseprateable
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inseparable
parts of their social
life
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.
For example
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, at weekend a phone call of
colleague
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a colleague
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is calling
in to
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into
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a person who
finally
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have
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has
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their weekend available to go for a picnic with their children and parents at
park
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a park
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If the person
refuse
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refuses
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to go with
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for
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to
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social
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a social
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event, the impression of his/her image as a co-worker might be negatively influenced, eventually cause a negative influence on their working environment. In conclusion, if
people
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can have a positive relationship with their
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co-workers
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co-worker
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co-workers
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, they can enjoy a lot of benefits.
However
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, I believe that
people
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are entitled to choose whether to join social
activities
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with their
colleagues
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during
leisure
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their leisure
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time or not.
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