Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Climate change represents a major threat to life on gravel. Some
people
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argue that one needs to find a way to live with it
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of preventing it. I completely disagree with
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, because I believe there are many ways to prevent climatic transformation.
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, weather transitions are happening
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which
people
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are exploiting nature
earth
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for their own sake.
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,
people
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are cutting down forests at a very rapid rate. Deforestation is taking place
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which many business advantages but, it is destroying the life cycle of the
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. The Government should impose strict laws and fines against the individuals or communities who are doing
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things. Higher authority should be held responsible so that, they would keep an eye on
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who are doing
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crimes.
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, folk are neglecting the fact that if they don't prevent changes now, it would affect their future children to suffer. The Government is taking action against the public who is responsible for climate change. They are
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imposing different types of laws to prevent transition in the surrounding.
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, political members are creating awareness in society about more utilisation of public transport so as to reduce pollution. Another example to prevent climatic variation is to plant more trees.
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taken by leaders of our society. It is not only the responsibility of one person but, of each individual person living in the society to save
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from harmful transformation.
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, prevention can be taken to save the
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from hazardous transition. In conclusion, I adhere that prevention is better than finding a way of living with climate change. Prevention would help the community to live a healthier and happy life on land.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Commercialization
  • Globalization
  • Cultural dilution
  • Traditional values
  • Secularization
  • Festivity
  • Heritage
  • Individualism vs. collectivism
  • Consumer culture
  • Intangible cultural heritage
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