In some countries more and more international travel is becoming cheaper and more countries are opening their doors to increase the number of tourists. Do the advantages of increasing tourism outweigh the disadvantage.

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tourism
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contributes a lot to
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the economy of the particular country like it provides more job opportunities for the local people.
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tourism
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industry
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develops many other industries like
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industry
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, transportation and restaurants.
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proves informative for People as they can
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their knowledge about various fields like cultures,
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areas and their realm of perspective
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alleviates tension. It brings recreation and relaxation.
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, people visit mesmerizing spots and forget their sorrows.
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sector has
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consequences on
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the environment
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Tourist
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may exploit
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the natural
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environment and
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pollution.
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, commuters put enormous stress on local land use which leads to soil erosion,
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habitat loss and
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endangered species.
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, the chances of crime
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increase
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because tourists are likely to carry money and valuable objects on holidays, so they become
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of many incidents. In conclusion,
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the tourism
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industry
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has enormous drawbacks,
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governments should take adequate measures to ensure that they reap maximum benefits from
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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