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Many parents give jobs to their children to do around the house in order to develop their characters and self-sufficiency. Discuss this idea and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Children
 and adults are being asked to help with some duties by their parents at their homes,
this
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effect
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children
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 personalities in a positive way,
however
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 I strongly recommend asking for some help
in
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 homes' works from
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young individuals.
Firstly
,
alot
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a lot
 of dads and moms think that
children
 should not participate in working after school, since
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this
 is their free time
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 they look to play with their friends and get some rest, but I see that
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 way
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 raising
children
 will harm them rather than help them
,
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 because kids will become so lazy and dependent on others which will lead for mony life
truobles
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troubles
,
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 kids are forced to leave their parent's property at 18 years old to study abroad, will face so many problems in combining between study and doing some stuff like washing, cleaning and cooking. another point of view
,
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 is that when working on the child's skills like being well organised and tidy by having some homes regular
responsibilties
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responsibilities
,
this
 will reflect on their characters and other life aspects,
such
 as his own
hygene
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hygiene
.
moreover
 the impacts on his attitude in his future job, like having the
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 of being organised which will help him with his time and desk management,
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will
defently
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definitely
 help him in
acheiving
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achieving
 his career goals. In conclusion, I recommend that schools should have some classes
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 to teach sons the art of
acheiving
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achieving
 some house's works in a good way and
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 a perfect time, and these classes should not
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theoritical
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theoretical
 only, but
also
 have some practical lessons done with
children
 to encourage them.
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