Many parents give jobs to their children to do around the house in order to develop their characters and self-sufficiency. Discuss this idea and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Children
and adults are being asked to help with some duties by their parents at their homes,
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children
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personalities in a positive way,
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I strongly recommend asking for some help
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homes' works from
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young individuals.
Firstly
,
alot
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a lot
of dads and moms think that
children
should not participate in working after school, since
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this
is their free time
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they look to play with their friends and get some rest, but I see that
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raising
children
will harm them rather than help them
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because kids will become so lazy and dependent on others which will lead for mony life
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troubles
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kids are forced to leave their parent's property at 18 years old to study abroad, will face so many problems in combining between study and doing some stuff like washing, cleaning and cooking. another point of view
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is that when working on the child's skills like being well organised and tidy by having some homes regular
responsibilties
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responsibilities
,
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will reflect on their characters and other life aspects,
such
as his own
hygene
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hygiene
.
moreover
the impacts on his attitude in his future job, like having the
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of being organised which will help him with his time and desk management,
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will
defently
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definitely
help him in
acheiving
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achieving
his career goals. In conclusion, I recommend that schools should have some classes
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to teach sons the art of
acheiving
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achieving
some house's works in a good way and
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a perfect time, and these classes should not
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theoritical
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theoretical
only, but
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have some practical lessons done with
children
to encourage them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • responsibility
  • accountability
  • time management
  • self-esteem
  • self-sufficiency
  • contribution
  • essential life skills
  • independent living
  • confidence
  • teamwork
  • cooperation
  • leisure
  • preparedness
  • household
  • tasks
  • character development
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