Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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awareness is created for entry products that may be beneficial to improving lives. In my

opinion

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I believe that the advantages of

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in terms of promoting things that work efficiently and effectively

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stronger than any disadvantages

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may have.

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, advertisement creates awareness about a

product

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you never imagined existed which may be the key solution to a problem at hand

furthermore

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it may

also

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promote products that serve as

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apply

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for

older

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an older

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tedious

way

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of living.

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, the invention of different electrical and

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kitchen gadgets

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has today aided efficient and effective meal preparation without

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one wouldn’t know of their existence

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it has helped reduce drastically the stress that has to be undergone using outdated instruments. Another point to consider is the technical know-how of how these various products operate which is visually displayed in the

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in addition

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it gives insight as to the various ways a

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can operate . By

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I mean watching an advert will shed more light as to how a

product

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is used or functions , one would practically see how a machine is put together or a food recipe is alternatively prepared so as to get the perfect taste. In conclusion,

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there are disadvantages

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advertisements

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, the advantages of it

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lives in terms of making things run efficiently and effectively

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serves as an educative medium bringing to light knowledge of how a new

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functions

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supersedes any of its demerits.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

253 words

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encourage
persuade
manipulative
unnecessary
excessive
artificial needs
desires
consumers
oversaturation
impulse buying
financial problems
inform
educate
features
benefits
innovations
raise awareness
social issues
positive behavior
enrich
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