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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #advertisements #products #lives
Owing to
advertisements
 awareness is created for entry products that may be beneficial to improving lives. In my
opinion
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 I believe that the advantages of
advertisements
 in terms of promoting things that work efficiently and effectively
is
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 stronger than any disadvantages
it
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they
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 may have.
Firstly
, advertisement creates awareness about a
product
 you never imagined existed which may be the key solution to a problem at hand
furthermore
 it may
also
 promote products that serve as
a
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replacements
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 for
older
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an older
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 tedious
way
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ways
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 of living.
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, the invention of different electrical and
non electrical
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 kitchen gadgets
that
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has today aided efficient and effective meal preparation without
advertisements
 one wouldn’t know of their existence
similarly
 it has helped reduce drastically the stress that has to be undergone using outdated instruments. Another point to consider is the technical know-how of how these various products operate which is visually displayed in the
advertisements
in addition
 it gives insight as to the various ways a
product
 can operate . By
this
 I mean watching an advert will shed more light as to how a
product
 is used or functions , one would practically see how a machine is put together or a food recipe is alternatively prepared so as to get the perfect taste. In conclusion,
although
 there are disadvantages
of
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advertisements
, the advantages of it
benefiting
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 lives in terms of making things run efficiently and effectively
also
it
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serves as an educative medium bringing to light knowledge of how a new
product
functions
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 supersedes any of its demerits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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