Some people advocate death penalty for those who committed violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society. Describe advantages and disadvantages of death penalty and give your opinion.

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and disadvantages of those. There are two main reasons to provoke
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, execution is a well-thinking solution for highly distractive crimes.
Firstly
, If someone commits a severe crime, putting
people
's lives in danger, they should get as harsh punishment as
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will they do and the crime rate may drop.
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, facilities that are responsible for those criminal
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. If
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penalty is accepted by society,
then
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problem will go away too.
On the other hand
, killing
people
for what they did is not humanistic and it is kind of a barbaric act. Taking someone’s life could be very problematic in the justice system because justice does not always works very well.
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so many
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when
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out they would get out. In
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people
would lose their lives for nothing and it caused crises in society.
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and helpful solution to violent crimes but there are
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decision.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advocates
  • Capital punishment
  • Contemporary society
  • Violent crimes
  • Deterrence
  • Retribution
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Imprisonment
  • Innocent
  • Unethical
  • Inhumane
  • Misuse
  • Legal systems
  • Heinous crimes
  • Closure
  • Moral concerns
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