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Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

#people #difficulties #lack
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Getting
a good sleep
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good sleep
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 is
vital
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 part of human daily routine, as they help in getting recovery from the stress happening over in our day
today
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to day
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 lifestyle which leads to drastic effects on
physically
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 and
mentally
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.
Recent
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sufficient sleep itself is turning out to be upside down and it is awful that
public
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 is facing huge difficulties in getting enough sleep. In
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due to
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lack
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 of sleep and possible solutions to be considered to overcome those.
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, the major concern lies in the physical strength of
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 body,
in other
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 tiredness caused
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lack
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 of sleep. For, example either
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 heavy workload or high pressure in
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life. Regardless of its causes make people
to
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think over it frequently results in insufficient sleep.
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, degrades
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physical strength which
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give
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 rise to other issues like
lack
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 of concentration on carrying out activities
in
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the next day. As a solution, people need to practice some exercise like yoga, swimming,
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 to overcome the stress that damages
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mental stability.
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, dark circles that get created
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 less sleep.
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 less glow over the face and
lack
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enthusiasms
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enthusiasm
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,
motivation
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and motivation
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 towards the goals. To illustrate a person with insufficient sleep may lead to changes in his facial glow which make him look
like
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dull, not interested in carrying out
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things and unhappy in life.
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, it hindrance his confidence,
loneness
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 and
lack
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 of trust from
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a people
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people
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perspective
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. To
overcome
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,
these
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a lot of facial products are available in the market to get rid of those dark circles and whitening products to look much fair. Carrying out to use
those
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 products
enhance
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 our appearance in the public. To summarize,
due to
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lack
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 of sleep in our,
lifestyle
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 numerous issues take place. Here we have discussed only a few of them like tiredness and dark circles which effects daily physical activities and public appearance. In spite of facing these, issues there is
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 a number of ways to overcome them in order to have good and sufficient sleep.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Insomnia
  • Sleep deprivation
  • Sleep disorders
  • Sleep quality
  • Fatigue
  • Exhaustion
  • Restless
  • Restorative sleep
  • REM sleep
  • Circadian rhythm
  • Sleep hygiene
  • Napping
  • Sleep duration
  • Melatonin
  • Sleep-inducing
  • Drowsiness
  • Sleep disturbances
  • Obstructive sleep apnea
  • Snoring
  • Sleepwalking
  • Sleep talking
  • Shift work
  • Sleeping pills
  • Sleep aid
  • Relaxation techniques
  • Meditation
  • Deep breathing
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