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Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees worked from home instead of travelling to a work place every day. Do you think the advantages of working from home outweigh the disadvantages?

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People have contradictory views on working from
home
 and daily travel to the workplace. As I believe, the benefit of working at the
office
 will be excessive weight compared to the
employees
'
work
-life balance will be affected adversely when working at
home
whereas
 the effectiveness of employee
work
 will be deteriorated
due to
 daily travel to the
office
. The essay is intended to discuss both views and my opinion. To commence with, it reduces wasted time on the road
due to
 road congestion and transport cost of travelling
office
.
Therefore
, the effectiveness of
work
 is relatively higher.
According to
 the research finding conducted by a university in student, employee productivity is comparatively higher when working at
home
due to
 financial benefits, higher cognitive pleasure when working at
home
 and free from the direct intervention of a superior for the
work
. On the opposite, if the
employees
 are facilitated to be employed from
work
, they are to be available for
work
 in extensive hours. During the Covid-19 pandemic period, more companies encouraged
employees
 to
work
 from
home
.
This
 leads to open access to
employees
 more working hours and less time for personal and other engagements. Because
,
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 they may be connected with the
office
 and reported to
work
 without direct supervision of their superiors which resulted in more pressure for
work
. In conclusion, working from the
office
 will not have much effect on maintaining a
work
-life balance which outweighs the saving cost and time
due to
 travelling.
Therefore
, I believe, the balance between the job and personal life outweighs the benefit of working from
home
.
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