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Problems with environmental pollution have become so serious that many countries are trying to solve these problems.

#pollution #countries
Although
 I have visited many polluted areas, one had extreme
air
 contamination.
Hence
 it is worth mentioning. Well, if I have to talk about a polluted, it would be Dhaka city in Bangladesh I’ve been living here for around 2 years. When I first came here, I was so surprised at how polluted the city is.
It’s
 so different from my hometown which is a green and clean rural area. There are many kinds of
pollution
 here:
air
pollution
,
water
pollution
 and even noise
pollution
. There are so many vehicles on the streets and they make noises and emit fumes all the time. It was especially terrible travelling on the street during peak hours.
Besides
,
it’s
 easy to see trash in rivers and lakes because some
people
 just throw their waste into these community
water
 sources without any awareness of the damage to the surrounding environment.
It’s
 even worse that some factories
also
 dump dirty
water
 and other waste directly into rivers so many of them are black and smelly. I think
pollution
 affects
people
’s lives in a negative way.
Air
pollution
 can cause serious respiratory diseases
such
 as asthma or lung cancer .
Water
 is polluted so
people
 may face
water
 scarcity in the future and the noise can drive
people
 crazy because
it’s
 really annoying and distracting. Many animals living in
water
 are
also
 affected, too. They are losing their habitats or food source since the
water
 is contaminated. Some of them may become extinct if we do not take action now. I hope the government will have some kinds of campaigns or TV shows to raise
people
’s awareness of protecting the environment and plant more trees in the city to improve
air
 quality . there are many
places
 around the world where the
air
 quality is poor
due to
 a variety of factors, including industrial emissions, vehicle exhaust, and natural sources
such
 as wildfires. These
places
 can be found in both urban and rural areas and can have a significant impact on the health and well-being of those who live and work there.
People
 visiting these
places
 may experience symptoms
such
 as difficulty breathing, irritation of the eyes and throat, and aggravation of existing health conditions
such
 as asthma. The feelings of
people
 towards
such
places
 vary from person to person, some may feel it's a threat to their health and well-being,
while
 some may not be affected much.
Submitted by Alma Islam on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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