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In the past, lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students in a classroom. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students.

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Education
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, nowadays, has a lot of different ways to be realized by new
technology
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. It is not necessary to have all the undergraduates in one classroom
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 it was in the past. As
educational
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the educational
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 system
develop
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develops
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 and change,
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 benefits of new
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 in the
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 of students’
education
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 as affordable and
flexibility
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 become top priorities.
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, no live connection in the educational
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 can be a downside. One evident benefit of new
technology
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 in the
process
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 of students’
education
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 is that it would make
education
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 more affordable. Consider it from the point of view of one form of new
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 in the
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 of
students’
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student’s
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education
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, or rather, online
education
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. It is believed that
,
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 students need to have only a stable connection and a device by which students could connect to online-lesson. Another reason that new
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 of students’
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 advantageous is that it could be used at the proper time and from
comfortable
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 place. On other hand, there is
obvious
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 disadvantage of new
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 in the
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 of students’
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.
Firstly
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, it would reduce the number of live connections between
student
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students
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 and
teacher
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teachers
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,
as well as
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 between students and classes.
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, it
сould
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could
 lead to health problems, because it has been reported that online
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cause
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sedentary
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 lifestyle. In conclusion,
while
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 there are plus points to having new
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 in the
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 of students’
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, too much
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Hybrid
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 system of
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 should be prioritised to ensure the transfer of knowledge for future generations.
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