The number of obese children is growing over the past years. Some say that parents should be punished for letting their child becoming fat. Discuss and give your opinion.
The change in dietary patterns has led to an increase in the number of overweight
children
over the years. Many individuals are of the
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belief
that Replace the word
believe
this
problem can be tackled if parents
are punished for the obesity
of their offspring. It is not wrong that parents
are responsible for their child's health, but it is not always the parent's fault given the current food
options
available in the market with high preservatives which is a leading cause of obesity
.
One of the major causes of obesity
is the processed food
that is
consumed which has a high percentage of preservatives in them. Healthy food
options
such
as meat, fruits and green vegetables are also
not organic and lead to various health problems including obesity
, hence
it leaves parents
with no options
to feed their child and it is not under their control to prevent this
issue. As per a survey of the Canadian food
market, It has been recorded that almost 80% of chicken is raised by the use of antibiotics which are then
sold in grocery stores. This
antibiotic accumulates in the bodies of children
, making them fat.
On the other hand
, many parents
because of their busy schedules cannot give proper time to their children
's diet plans. This
a result leads to bad eating habits in children
such
as eating high sugar levels and fried food
options
. Sugar is the highest and most common reason for obesity
and children
should be stopped to consume it in high quantities by their parents
.
To conclude
, obesity
is a cause of many diseases, therefore
kids should be protected from it by teaching them good eating habits as much as possible. It should also
be the responsibility of the government to ban unhealthy food
items from the market so that parents
can take care of their children
's health.Submitted by pragati235 on
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