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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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Humans are responsible for destroying the environment. A variety of environmental
problems
 are caused by the community but we can take steps to reduce these
problems
.
This
 essay will discuss environmental
problems
 and how the
government
 and
people
 can address these
problems
. Nowadays, the first main reason for the depletion of nature is deforestation. Many
people
 are cutting down trees
due to
 which
problems
 like lack of Oxygen
is
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are
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 rising. In some areas, forests are devasted and
development
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the development
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 of the buildings is done.
For instance
, in
India
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,India
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 a few
people
for
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apply
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are cutting down trees for their advantage like earning money from selling the
woods
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wood
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. They don't realise, soon there would be
scarcity
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a scarcity
the scarcity
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 of oxygen. The
Government
 should implement strict fines and laws against individuals who are responsible for damaging nature and playing with
health
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the health
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 of
people
.
Thus
, strict punishment should be given so that
people
 won't repeat mistakes. The other main reason is, companies are dumping waste directly into rivers and on the roads. Chemicals are emitted from
such
 waste and these chemicals are inhaled by the
people
.
For example
, researchers have proved 40% of health
problems
 are due
inhalation
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to inhalation
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 of hazardous gasses. It is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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 of every individual to take care of mother Earth. The
government
 should run campaigns and strict laws should be imposed to avoid dumping of industrial waste. If the community takes responsibility for saving the planet,
then
 we can avoid environmental
damages
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damage
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. In conclusion, it is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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 of the
Government
 and
the
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apply
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individuals to save the Earth from
people
 who are trying to destroy the planet.
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