Consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s lives. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

We are living in a competitive era where every company competing and introducing new products in the market every other day.
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, whether or not
this
trend is excellent or poor for the people is a topic of frequent debate. I genuinely believe that despite
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its few drawbacks, the benefits are more and I will explain
this
in the upcoming paragraphs. Commodities loaded with
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technology provide comfort and save time in one's life.
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, giant companies
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new products and
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updated features in existing ones to compete with their rivals;
hence
,
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more people get attracted to buy as it may add value to their lives in many ways
such
as saving time, effort or simply status.
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, numerous studies are done that workers become more productive when they work on spreadsheets as compared to traditional paperwork. In
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world, everyone wants to be comfortable and save his or her time
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is
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attainable using
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technology. Now
this
means that most people will be inclined to buy commodities whenever they see that it could comfort their lives in some way,
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to more and more consumption of goods. It is a need of the hour to become more and more productive and nobody can deny
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positive
outcomes that are helpful in
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case.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • improved living standards
  • ease of communication
  • variety of choices
  • increased productivity
  • waste generation
  • environmental impact
  • materialistic mindset
  • financial burden
  • inequality
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