The TV and the internet provide opportunity to ordinary people to become famous. Is this a positive or a negative development?

Normal citizens are gaining
popularity
because of the web and television.
According to
me
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this
is a positive development as
this
gives a way to earn
money
and introduce new talent to the industry. Nowadays, television and
internet
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the internet
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have become the main means of entertainment and communication in the world. Everybody needs
money
and would like to become rich. One of the fastest
way
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to earn
money
is through
the
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entertainment channels. Earlier
this
was restricted to only rich and established people in the media. So if someone wants to earn
money
in
a
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easy way, TV and
web
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the web
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would be the fastest mode.
For instance
, youtube has gained a lot of
popularity
nowadays
that
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and
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many common people have become famous and rich in no time. There is a lot of new talent coming up in
the
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recent times. There are many arts, sports and cultural events where normal man is exhibiting his talent.
However
this
is
being
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restricted to a particular area or region. If
this
will be telecasted
in
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TV and online channels
then
people all over the world will watch the performance thereby making them famous.
For example
, PV Sindhu who was from
a
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infamous family was able to gain
popularity
within a short span of time in tennis all over the world
due to
media and
internet
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the internet
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. In conclusion, I would agree that it is a good growth for ordinary citizens to gain
popularity
through
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media
and online mediums.
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