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Some people believe that it is important to spend a lot of money on family celebrations. While others think it is a waste of money. Discuss both views.

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Family
celebrations
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 as weddings and funerals are costly and many
people
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 save for years, even a fraction of
people
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 borrow to make it look extravagant or have to follow a tradition. Nowadays, it is a debate whether spending a fortune on family
celebrations
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 is advantageous or simply meaningless. In
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 essay, the writer will try to explain both views. There are certain justifications for the high expense of family
celebrations
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. First is cultural appreciation. Weddings, especially for a society that still upholds tradition, can be considered as a ticket for new-family to be welcomed
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 groups. High expense that comes from a long guest list or several ceremonial steps is necessary in order to follow the culture.
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, It's a once-in-a-lifetime celebration (for some
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), so they do think it will be worthwhile.
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in midst of busy life, family
celebrations
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 are usually the only
time
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 extended family members can meet one another.
People
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 usually want it to be enjoyable and memorable,
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 they are willing to pay more for higher quality
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. On the other side, certain
people
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 questioned the importance of having extravagant or polished
celebrations
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.
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money spent on that one-
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 event can be used
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. Rather than having big spending on the wedding day, it is better to use it to improve the quality of life after marriage.
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lavish vacation or family
time
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 is not as important as the values that parents need to teach their children. A meaningful and memorable family bonding
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 is not based on the hotel they are staying at but on the conversation and laughter that happens
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 they are together. In the writer's opinion, both of the views do have their merits.
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, the writer does believe that money spends on weddings and birthdays is justified because, in that way, life can be more memorable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cherish
  • nurture
  • strengthen
  • bond
  • create memories
  • enjoyment
  • sense of belonging
  • reconnect
  • unite
  • traditions
  • create traditions
  • financial burden
  • priorities
  • moderation
  • budget
  • frugal
  • extravagant
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