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Some people think only students who achieve the best results should be rewarded, while others think it is more important to reward students who get huge improvement. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #students #results #reward #improvement
Somebody
think
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 that only the top
students
 should be rewarded,
however
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,however
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 there are
also
 many
people
think
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who think
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 that rewarding
students
 who get huge
improvement
is
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are
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also
 very
imporant
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important
. As far as
i
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I
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 can see, the
students
 who achieve the best and the
students
 who get huge improve are both need to be rewarded. They are both very important. Some
people
 think that no matter what the process is like, the main aim is to have a good result, so the results are the most important. Only the
students
 who achieve the best results need to be rewarded. On the other side, rewarding the top
students
also
 can encourage other
students
 who work hard. Because the other student will know that if they want to get rewards,they need to be the top
students
 and they will keep working hard.
This
 can lead to an
overall
improvement
 in the performance of the class. But the result may not very as good as we think. The number of top
students
 is limited, so many
people
 can’t achieve the best results after hard
working
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. They may feel very depressed because of that.
What
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 worse, they may think that getting
improvement
 is useless
,
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 because is too hard to be a top
students
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student
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. But
people
 can’t achieve
a
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apply
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big success in a short time, they need to improve themselves gradually, so getting
improvement
 is very important. The
students
 who improve a lot
also
 need to be rewarded. In summary,
i
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I
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 agree with the opinion that the
students
 who get
improvement
also
 need to be rewarded . When teachers reward the top
students
, they don’t forget to reward the
students
 who get a huge
improvement
.
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