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Some people claim that there are more disadvantages to having a car than its advantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car.

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In recent years, almost everyone can have their own vehicle.
However
,some people think that owning a personal car is bad,
this
 is because they believe that it has many disadvantages.
Furthermore
, my personal opinion is that there is no harm in having your own car,
on the other hand
, I think it has more benefits.
To begin
 with,these days many people believe that having their own automobile can cause many major problems.
Such
 as traffic jams which make everybody late to work or somewhere.
Furthermore
, one's claims that it may
also
 have an effect on the ozone layer.
This
 is because fossil fuels may be the cause of ozone layer erosion.
On the other hand
,one of the main pros of having a personal automobile is that it may give you a great sense of freedom.
Moreover
,it allows you to do anything you want without anyone's permission.What's more that your driving time can be planned for your convenience.Letting you whenever drive whenever rather than when you have to catch a taxi. Taking all into account,having a private auto has some drawbacks.
However
, I believe that all the negative sides are balanced out by the positive ones.
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