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Some people claim that there are more disadvantages to having a car than its advantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car.

#people #car
To sum
of
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 many people's opinion backwards
outweight
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outweigh
benefits
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the benefits
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while
 other
one's
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ones
one
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 agrees
of
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with
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 owning a private car. Be considered by
mostly
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most
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 scientists having a car
is
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badly impacted
on
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our society.Because of
this
 they damage air
ingridients
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ingredients
 and contribute
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to noisy
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noisy
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noise
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 pollution.
Likewise
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 they can create
a
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apply
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long distance traffic jams
as well as
it
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apply
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waste
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the waste
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amount
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a amount
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 of time.
Besides
 one of the worried
thing
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things
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 about rising transport types caused kinda traffic accidents.What's
more
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,more
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 it may be requested some expenses dor details and
charging
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charges
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 for taxes. Despite
of
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apply
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this
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these
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 contrasts they already create
specially
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special
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 comfort for society.
For instance
 you
really
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are really
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 free to go anywhere you want and you can use it as a home. you
sholdn't
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shouldn't
 have to
wait
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forwait
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 public
transports
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transport
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 or a uber when
weather
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the weather
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as
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is as
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 not as you like.
Last
 but not least you can travel
surroundings
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to surroundings
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 without any borders and limits of course if you have a licence and visa. To
connclude
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conclude
 in my view,
buy
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buying
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 a
motor-car
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motor car
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 isn't a tragedy as
mostly
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most
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 thought but
few
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a few
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fossil providing
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fossil-providing
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vehicle
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vehicles
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 or one's demands
an
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apply
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alternative energy is truly supported and
according to
 purpose.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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