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As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree?

#computers #education #role #teachers #classroom
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It is argued that computers will replace
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schools. As technology is upgrading with time,
teachers
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 may feel the fear
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 being replaced by it. In my
views
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, the job
role
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teachers
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 will shrink
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but not completely vanish. The internet is
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 source of research these days. To utilize the facility of internet, kids are being provided with
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computers, mobiles or iPads by parents or schools. The schools have
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smart boards for
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new ways of learning. These tools are increasing the imagination power of the kids and understanding the concepts visually.
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, using
smart
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 board it can be easily shown
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the pupils the concepts
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 as ‘how food digests in the human body!’, ‘how the Earth, Moon and Sun
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 around each other!’
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etc. As every concept can be explained deeply using the videos and the
role
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 of
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 shrinks in the Education system. Above facts are
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to
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show that there will be no job
role
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teachers
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classroom
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. Since every student learns
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its
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their
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 own pace, the
role
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 of the teacher will be limited to
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 those students who need help to understand the concepts again and again. Other roles will be to clear the doubts and plan the sessions.
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, the usage of computers is increasing in day to day life of students.
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 will not impact the duties of
teachers
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 completely, but
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however
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 the duties will shrink and some new
kind
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 of duties will add on.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital learning
  • Personalized guidance
  • Blended learning
  • Remote education
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Human interaction
  • Cultural dimension
  • Mentorship
  • Critical thinking
  • Educational technology
  • Learning outcomes
  • Role model
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