The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.
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The two pie charts show the proportion of money spent on various household necessities in
Malaysia
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and
Japan
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in 2010. The date is calibrated in percentage.
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, the data indicate that in both cases food, housing and other goods and services were the main expenses
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both countries spent
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on health care. It can be clearly seen from the chart, in
Malaysia
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the greatest proportion of expenditure (34%) was on housing,
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in
Japan
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housing accounted for just 21% of the total. Followed by in
Japan
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the greatest single expense was other goods and services at 29%, compared with 26% in
Malaysia
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.
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, food came
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second place in
Japan
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, at 24%,
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in
Malaysia
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the actual proportion was higher (27%). In
Japan
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, another major expense was transport, at 20%, but
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was much lower in
Malaysia
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(10%). Surprisingly, in both countries, the smallest percentage of expenditure was on health care.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia, japan with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household expenditures
  • proportion
  • cultural differences
  • economic differences
  • living standards
  • real estate market
  • public transportation
  • private transportation
  • infrastructure
  • government healthcare policies
  • quality of life
  • holistic view
  • inflation
  • economic growth
  • societal norms
  • globalization
  • communication expenses
  • education expenses
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