A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sport team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to company in your letter -describe the benefit of sponsoring the sport team -summarise the benefits of paying the concepts -say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to suggest some renovation ideas for our

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area

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with respect to the complaints which have been received.

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, I would like to point out the complaints about our present

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counter.

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we are providing a sitting facility, but the arranged chairs are old fashion, and it is quite uncomfortable for guests.

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, some feedback was that better to fix the air conditioner rather than the fans and

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some are mentioned that the entrance should be more attractive.

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, welcoming guests is essential, because that would be the first impression of our firm. So, it is our responsibility to make the

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more comfortable and attractive. Sometimes during the peak season, visitors would have to wait for a long time and during that period they will spend their time in the

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, it is crucial to make the space more entertaining. Since we have a spacious

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for

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, we have to do some refurbishments.

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, the sitting

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could change with new couches and a tea table, to provide a centralised air conditioning facility.

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, decorating walls with different paintings and providing a television

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would be captive for visitors. I hope these ideas would be beneficial for your renovation process and make your new

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more productive. Best regards, Asha Vijayan

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

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secondly
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in additional
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

226 words

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