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The best way to reduce crime among young people is to teach parents good parenting skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion and examples

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These days the young population is committing
crimes
 more than ever before and
therefore
 people opine that good parenting can help to alleviate the situation.
However
, I do not agree with
this
 statement and
this
 essay will argue why it is not entirely essential to train
parents
 to reduce
crime
 among youngsters. It is insensitive to blame young offenders’
parents
 for their
crimes
. These days, people generalize by saying that because of poverty or negligence in parenting the young population is committing more and more
crimes
.
This
 is a misunderstood notion as everybody has their own mindset. Parenting or family background has no correlation with somebody’s criminal intent. There have been several instances where teenagers coming from educated and affluent families committed illegal activities like cyber
crime
 or violation of traffic rules.
Furthermore
, parenting is a natural process, and as ,
such
 it cannot be taught in classrooms.
Consequently
, introducing training sessions for
parents
 would not help to control the
crime
 committed by youngsters.
On the contrary
, criminal tendencies among young people can be controlled by imposing stringent legislation and limiting the use of the internet. Generally speaking, no country has stringent laws against young offenders and as ,
such
 there is nothing to deter them from committing
crimes
. So, imposing strict punishment would surely control the
crime
 rate committed by them.
Additionally
, the internet has appeared as the root cause of the growing criminal activities by the young population.
Thus
,
parents
 should be more vigilant about their online activities.
To conclude
,
this
 essay argued why the training on parenting skills is not effective to reduce the
crime
 committed by their children,
instead
 the government should devise other ways to control the situation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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