In many countries people increasingly talk about money (how much they earn or how much they pay for things in their daily conversations). Why? Is this a positive or negative development?

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, the residents in many countries
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their daily
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between conversations with
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financial
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eastern countries adore to ask about
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jobs,
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in
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because they consider
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around the world, it is convenient to get information through the internet. On the hand, it is easier for many companies to have business overseas, and that makes the workers
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in different situations for facing
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with others to know
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money issues
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our friends or co-workers, it will
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. Though talking about
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which
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lessons from each other. In conclusion, though there are
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talking about money in public, there are more
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  • materialism
  • economic disparity
  • transparency
  • financial planning
  • financial stress
  • culture of comparison
  • societal taboos
  • financial literacy
  • savings
  • investments
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