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It is believed by many that those read for pleasure develop better imagination and language skills than people who prefer to watch TV. Do you agree or disagree?

#read #pleasure #imagination #language #skills #people #tv
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 different views about
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 who would like to read
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 better
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 and
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 competence than
people
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 who prefer to watch
TV
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. As far as practical experience and general theory are concerned,
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 strongly hold that it is a more effective
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 to develop
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’s
imagination
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 and
language
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skills
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 by reading. First and foremost, reading books can provide
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 with more opportunities to imagine, generally, reading only provides
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 with a literal concept, the specific expression of
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the picture
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 should be described through their own
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,
on the contrary
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, watching
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 is a direct display of the specific picture,
then
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people
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 lose the opportunity to imagine these.
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, when some
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 read Harry Potter, they could imagine the incredible magic by reading the wonderful sentences in the
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, but when they watch
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, the images on the screen will solidify their thinking,
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, reading is a better
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 to stimulate
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imagination
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.
People
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 can provide their
imagination
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 by constantly reading and generating new ideas.
Secondly
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, reading is
also
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 a good approach to
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people
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’s
language
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skills
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, the
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 contains profound
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 culture since each
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 has undergone many revisions and refinements to ensure the accuracy of
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.
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 process has
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proved that the display of
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skills
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 is irreplaceable cause
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 shows are
also
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 produced through scripts.
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 that, when
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 first begin to learn languages and characters, they are often given a
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 by their teacher and generally become more skilled by learning word by word.
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 means
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 could improve their
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 by
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 the sentences of books they read.
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,
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this
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way
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,
people
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 can practice their
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skills
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 and get better. In a nutshell,
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 agree that reading is a better
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 to develop
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 and
language
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skills
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, as far as my
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 quote from James Madison goes, as long as the reason of a man continues
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, different
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, some
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 may oppose me,
however
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,
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 believe that they will compromise after being exposed to my article.
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