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It is believed by many that those read for pleasure develop better imagination and language skills than people who prefer to watch TV. Do you agree or disagree?

#read #pleasure #imagination #language #skills #people #tv
Someone
have
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 different views about
people
 who would like to read
improve
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to improve
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 better
imagination
 and
language
 competence than
people
 who prefer to watch
TV
. As far as practical experience and general theory are concerned,
i
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 strongly hold that it is a more effective
way
 to develop
people
’s
imagination
 and
language
skills
 by reading. First and foremost, reading books can provide
people
 with more opportunities to imagine, generally, reading only provides
people
 with a literal concept, the specific expression of
picture
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the picture
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 should be described through their own
imagination
,
on the contrary
, watching
TV
 is a direct display of the specific picture,
then
people
 lose the opportunity to imagine these.
For example
, when some
people
 read Harry Potter, they could imagine the incredible magic by reading the wonderful sentences in the
book
, but when they watch
TV
, the images on the screen will solidify their thinking,
therefore
, reading is a better
way
 to stimulate
imagination
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.
People
 can provide their
imagination
 by constantly reading and generating new ideas.
Secondly
, reading is
also
 a good approach to
practice
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people
’s
language
skills
, the
book
 contains profound
language
 culture since each
book
 has undergone many revisions and refinements to ensure the accuracy of
language
.
These
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 process has
been
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proved that the display of
language
skills
 is irreplaceable cause
TV
 shows are
also
 produced through scripts.
Not to mention
 that, when
people
 first begin to learn languages and characters, they are often given a
book
 by their teacher and generally become more skilled by learning word by word.
This
 means
people
 could improve their
language
 by
imitate
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 the sentences of books they read.
Therefore
,
through
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in
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this
way
,
people
 can practice their
language
skills
 and get better. In a nutshell,
i
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I
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 agree that reading is a better
way
 to develop
imagination
 and
language
skills
, as far as my
favorite
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 quote from James Madison goes, as long as the reason of a man continues
fallible
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, different
opinion
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 will
formed
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, some
people
 may oppose me,
however
,
i
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 believe that they will compromise after being exposed to my article.
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