Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals.” Discuss both these views and give your opinion .

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Some young
people
choose to live with their
parents
even after they graduated and have found jobs. I personally believe the pros of the
trend
outweigh the cons. On the one hand,
this
trend
has some disadvantages. Living with
parents
will lead to some conflicts
due to
the different views about things. Young
People
and their
parents
are not from the same generation which will result in distinct ways of dealing with the same question.
For example
, young
people
usually stay up late until
the
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late
night
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,
while
their
parents
might go to bed
more
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eariler
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earlier
as they still have work to do in the morning. These kinds of disagreements will negatively influence the family bond.
On the other hand
,
this
trend
has more advantages. The rent in mega-cities is keep rising nowadays, young
people
cannot afford the rent for a comfortable place to live. Despite the youngsters
have
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a job and income, if they
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want
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live alone, the rent will take a large proportion of their earnings. The money left to them is (can) hardly
to
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cover other expenses
such
as paying
for
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the bill and having dinner outside.
This
awkward situation
leave
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(s) young
people
with very limited options.
Moreover
, if young
people
choose to live with their
parents
, they can save
the
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energy from doing the housework. The majority of youngsters are reluctant to do house chores, but their
parents
already
got
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used to them.
For example
, if young
people
live in their
parents'
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house, they can have breakfast made by their
parents
(and)
also
do not have to do dishwashing works.
Overall
, it seems to me that the benefit of the
trend
to
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living with
parents
outweigh the drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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