people often find it difficult to adapt to new situations in their lives. why do you think this is? what measures can you suggest to make it easier?

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that it is tough to accept a new position in their
lives
.
this
is probably
due to
the fear of making risky decisions in their daily
lives
.
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there are methods to tackle these
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of problems. There
are
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a wide range of reasons for
this
issue, but the first reason is connected to
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fear. majority of
people
learnt the hard way that new and unknown decisions , frequently don't have their
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consequenses
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consequences
. so they find it hard to make difficult decisions and eventually , build a modern statement in their normal
lives
.
for instance
,
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local research in an urban office illustrated about 70 per cent of
personnels
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personnel
prefer to keep their actual job than get hired in a better and higher post.
this
represents that most
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people
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are
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sensitive
about bringing changes into their regular
lives
. Another factor is responsibility. based on human
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property,
people
mostly find it strict to take responsibility for everything
such
as animals,
children
and even their intentions.
therefore
they just avoid making new
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decisions
and facing their results so they can escape from future responsibilities.
also
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people
admit after a
while
they usually get the habits
moreover
it may be damaging if they leave it to the new locations.
However
, there are some ways to deal with
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of drawbacks. I think the most obvious solution is,
parents
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encourage
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their
children
to find their ways and make their important resolutions by themselves.
this
would enable them to make harder intentions when they grow up and become adults.
for example
,
children
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try every possible
ways
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to find the correct way, are more independent and able to take risks.
consequently
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they can adopt new spots very easily.
In
addition
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people
should increase their confidence, by doing
this
they can rely on themselves and trust their choices.
this
means that they would get
preapared
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prepared
for modern areas. In conclusion, there are several reasons for accepting new regions strictly
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people
.
due to
lack
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of confidence and escaping from responsibilities,
people
find it strange to face
with
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changes. as discussed above , there are measures
such
as nurturing
children
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confident
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or accepting our choices without regrets
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available.
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