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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that in many cities around the world there are constant traffic jams. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from owning cars?

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The number of
people
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 who own a personal four-wheeler has dramatically raised over the
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 3 decades owing to traffic congestion problems in many of the major cosmopolitans and metropolitans across the globe. In my personal view,
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 trend should take a downward turn before humans witness more frequent unprecedented consequences
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 environmental pollution and the health hazards
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 could potentially lead to.
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 with, the change in the modern day lifestyle leading to excessive
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 of cars by the public
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 leading to less consumption of public transport even to smaller distances.
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, there have been a lot of CO2 emissions from these vehicles leading to air pollution which
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 causes detrimental health effects to
people
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 who are inhaling
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 oxygen which is polluted
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 some hazardous gases.
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, in New Delhi which is the most polluted city in the world, back in 2019, the air quality index had fallen down much below the minimum level because of which many
people
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 suffered from lung and heart diseases.
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, the lesser the pollution the better it is for the environment.
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, it is quite challenging for any individual who possesses a personal car to stay away from using it for travelling. Owning is not a serious concern,
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however
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 the
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 is deeply concerning.
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, in the city of Mumbai, on a daily ,basis at least 4 million
people
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 use public transport to commute within the city,
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, it is not the same case in other metro cities.
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 these many individuals avail the government transport to commute, even
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 Mumbai is one of the top cities with traffic congestion issues. So, more and more
people
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 have to limit the
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 of personal vehicles. In order to achieve that, the government must put strict regulations on the
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 rather than the ownership of automobiles.
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, traffic authorities must enforce rules to impose heavy fines on individual automobile owners who travel alone with a lesser capacity in the cars and encourage them to take public buses or trains.
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, they should enrich the rules to control congestion issues.
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