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Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The opinion of
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among
 people in terms of functionality and content.
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 it is true that the primary usage of
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 generally is
educational
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 purposes, I personally believe that
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also
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 can be fun
places
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.
Museums
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usally
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usually
 have been used to learn about history and art. In schools,
education
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the education
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 system is based on reading and learning from books and writing
in
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paper on exams. Year to year,
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conversional
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conversational
 method is varied with new approaches,
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culture
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 tours and museum visits organized by school administrations. Thanks to
museums
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, school pupils can learn history from
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type
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 of visuals and images
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 by galleries as the alternative
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 boring lecture notes and with two-dimensioned books.
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,
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museums
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are tend
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 to be informative
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amoung
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among
 people and especially
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teenagers
, it does not mean that
museums
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are have
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 to be boring and serious
places
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. After the beginning of
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the milennium
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milennium
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millennium
millennial
 age, a new era has been started in art history, named “Modern Art”. Almost subjects of the half of galleries represented in
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 are related to modern art. In
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 new trend,
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started to be much more interactive,
performance based
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 and out of cliché
places
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.
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, nowadays activities have shown variety in
museums
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 and it enables to
museums
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 more enjoyable and attractive spots. In conclusion, the functionality and content of
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 are still educative,
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 the number of galleries
are
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is
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 increasing based on entertainment nowadays.
Thus
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,
museums
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 can be used
both
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for both
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 educational and entertainment purposes.
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