Children brought up in families with less money are better prepared for life than those from wealthy families. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a conviction among people that people who were grown up in low-income families are far more ready for
life
in contrast
to those who are brought up in opulent conditions. My views bear a resemblance to
this
concept. Since needy
children
are already adapted to
life
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difficulties,
hence
they have
ability
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from releasing from a predicament. Unlike, it is hard for those, who have
not
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meet
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any hardships throughout the entire period of their childhood, to deal with
this
in the future. I summarize the ideas and go into more
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in
this
essay.    Naturally, the more challenges one has faced, the easier it is to struggle with.
Thus
, deprived
children
are more willing to
life
trials.
This
is a result of the experience they gained. Having experienced difficulties in living position, finances, and health in the past, people accumulate skills.
Moreover
, they get used to it. Thanks to what, tomorrow, it may seem to them not only as a normal case, but
also
they would already be familiar with the solution and the way out of the problem. Soren Kierkeaard's famous quote might serve as an applicable example. "
Life
is not a problem to be solved, but a reality to be experienced", he presumes.    If background experience is anything to go by,
children
, accustomed to comfort, are in trouble. Because parents of rich youth provide everything for them at any time. Whether it is education, clothing, or even housing.
As a result
,
this
adolescent is not let to feel difficulty.
Consequently
, it is going to be complicated for them in the future to face it first.   
To conclude
my thoughts, adaptation makes anything lighter,
therefore
children
grew
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up in poor families are better prepared for
life
tests.
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