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Some people believe that life in a big city is difficult while others say that it is more convenient. What are the advantages and disadvantages of living in big cities?

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Nowadays, talking
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about
 how hard is to live in a metropole is becoming increasingly popular. In order to support the large demand of employers, these places always are crowded
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 people.
However
, there are both pros and cons to deciding to live there. In
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 why
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 in a big city can be difficult and some
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 the challenges to expect. Let's begin by looking at the advantages regarding inhabit
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a central area. One of the main positive reason to choose these locations
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 that everything
that is
 demanded is offered by a near place. What I mean by
this
 is that everywhere there are places
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selling
 or offering services, like hospitals,
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, malls or schools, even if you need something during the night is possible to buy
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 telephone.
Secondly
,
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life
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 a big site permits
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easier
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documentation
 inside it because, not only the public transportation is well prepared to cover all areas but
also
 these ways to move normally are linked, which makes
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 to change from bus to train,
for example
. The UK,
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instance
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, have a great scheme that improves
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mobility. Turning to the other side of the argument,
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polution
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pollution
 is a delicate topic which makes harder
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life
 in big cities. In order to supply the demand
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 work,
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sales
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 and
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commercials
, even if is a
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holiday
, the city is moving and making noise and smoke. People who are
resident
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 there try to reduce the outside sound and
other kind
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 of
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pollution
,
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 but is impossible to clear 100%. Another issue is that, as a more demanded place, the cost to keep
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life
 there is higher.
In other words
, everything is
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, like parking a car, firefighter fees, hospital taxes and fines. All things considered, starting a
life
 in a big city is never easy. You need to weigh up the pros of the services accessibility, faster movement and so on, and the cons of
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by
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polution
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pollution
. Personally, I believe that the
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benefits
 in terms of
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 near
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our necessities outweigh any
nevatives
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negatives
negative
.
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