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Developments in science and technology have caused environmental problems. Some people think that a simpler way of life will protect the environment, while others believe that science and technology can solve environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, public debate has been going on over whether how science and technology evolution has a negative impact on our nature and what would be the best way to recover the environment. I tend to believe that research in science and technology can solve these problems for the following reasons.
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 main factors support the idea of developing new innovations focused on environmental issues. The primary factor we need to take into consideration is that the only way to find a viable solution to save our planet is to invest more time researching
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 to change how people live their lives. Obviously, the human race is quite dependent on resources which were developed by them.
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, the response of well-studied actions would be faster,
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 life would need centuries to show some differences. A third reason for my belief is that with recently arrived ideas is possible to recycle more trash and other materials, which would not only recover natural renewable sources but
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 reduce the necessity to extract more from nature. I admit that science and technology have been used more to not only extract faster but
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 to produce more, which pollutes more. Despite that, a change in our ways of working could solve
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 issue, like rising industrial fees and transforming them into incentives to recover our nature. In conclusion, I would argue that the focus on environmental recovery should be in technological and scientific areas.
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, it would be generally advisable for the government to allocate more financial resources
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 a more beneficial action.
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