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Developments in science and technology have caused environmental problems. Some people think that a simpler way of life will protect the environment, while others believe that science and technology can solve environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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These days, public debate has been going on over whether a simple way of
life
 could preserve natural resources and animals or
the
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technological and scientific
solutions
. I tend to believe that some developments would lead to a green future for the following reasons. Three main factors support the idea
of
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that some available
solutions
 can aid the environment. The primary factor we need to take into consideration is that the products now are manufactured under currently strict law. Obviously, companies which do not follow the sustainable standard of production suffer penalties.
Besides
, developing
solutions
 to the environment is the business of a lot of companies which sharply improved their profits by recovering damaged areas or providing
solutions
 to the ecosystem.
That is
 to say, taking care of our planet is a kind of market as well. A third reason for my belief is that the number of
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about
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the planet in
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modern
life
offer
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 a variety of strategies in order to cope with
this
 issue without
harm
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the
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consumerism. I admit that a minimalist style of
life
 could protect the Earth. Despite that, it is easier to adapt to green products and
solutions
 once a simple
life
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 not cover all necessities of people nowadays. In conclusion, I would argue that science and technology are
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 a path towards
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consumerism-environmental balance.
Accordingly
, it would be generally good
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 their achievements to make
this
 world a better place.
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